[September Contest] Don't Forget Your Wishes

Ah! I read this poem before, but I guess I didn't comment on it. Anyways, just wanted to say hat this is one of my favorite poems! I'm a real insane person about not being sane (does that make sense?) so I love poems about not being normal. I also like the rhythm - rhymes give poetry something that really appeals to me.

Keep your head up in the sky, Esther!

Hey,
I liked this poem. The ideas were really good and you explained them well. The only thing I disliked was the last line as it kind of just ended without any real conclusion. Everything flowing nicely until that last line so I would suggest you edit that bit. Other than that it was a wonderful poem- well done.
-Blossom

This is a good poem. But I love all your poems Esther. You always work rhymes in just the right way. General comments:

Esther Sylvester wrote:Life is going well for you,
but something still is missing. For these first two lines I would think questions would get me more interested. It would also add to the rhymes, but like I said above these are just my thoughts.
Could it be that all this time,
you just have not been wishing?

A wish is such a special thing,
as it keeps our hope alive.
But sticking with reality, "But" doesn't seem like the right word. The word but makes me think of a contradiction. I love you, but... This would sound better When....or by...
we push our hopes aside.

We are blinded by the normal
And guided by the sane I don't get this line you seem to be contradicting the one before it. You just said we are blinded by the normal. Do you mean insane, or am I not seeing something?
We follow the strict rules of life,
But now life just feels the same. Sane and Same don't rhyme, not that I could come up with a rhyme or anything.

Have you all simply forgotten? The word "simply" seems to throw off the rhythm to me.
The days when you were young? This shouldn't be a question mark. The only way it should be one is if you replaced the one on the line before this one with a comma, but I am not good with commas so I am not sure even this is correct.
When you dreamt of fairytales
Those days are not undone. I feel like this should have an exclamation point I read it in my mind like it did anyway. Without one it just doesn't seem as urgent.

Your dreams and hopes are with you,
They can never truly die. I would replace the word "can" with something more descriptive or specific.
So make a wish with all your heart,
And kiss your pains good bye.